Expository Essay Rewrites: October 2017

I am still working on grading all the essays, but I will release them (and update the due dates) as finalize the grades. If I do not get the essays back to blocks 2 & 3 by the end of today, the grade will be moved into quarter 2.

Rewriting your expository essay is NOT mandatory, but it is highly recommended to rewrite if you scored less than a 30/50.

BLOCK 1 : Your re-write are due a week from 10/5/17 -> which means that they need to be submitted to me, following the protocol outline below by 10/12/17. They may NOT be submitted online. These are now due 10/19/17 due to the glitch in the grading system.

BLOCK 2: TBD

BLOCK 3: TBD

Note: There are 2 options to earn points back: an entire re-write or a reflection on how to improve in the future.


5 Things to Watch for in your Rewrite

  1. NO CONTRACTIONS…or other little mistakes. Edit your essay -> proofread! The little time that it takes can greatly affect your grade. Try to have someone else read it and check it for grammar and punctuation mistakes. Or go to grammarly.com and use their grammar checker, but make sure you actually make the changes.
  2. Use CEE! By using CEE (subClaim, Explain, Evidence) you are helping your essay stay focused which helps your reader understand your purpose better. It also allows you to check your own reasoning behind your discussion.
  3. Incorporate PROMPT LANGUAGE! Again, this helps both you the writer, and your reader to focus on your purpose. By not incorporating prompt language you ar enot going to score above a Band 4 on your General Paper content rubric. I went a little easier on this essay when it came down to it, but next time I will be looking for successful use of prompt language and will be deducting major points for it!
  4. Avoid using informal language/phrases such as:
    • “To start”
    • “Clearly”
    • “And so,”
    • “That’s the end”
    • …think about if you could say it out loud in a presentation to Dr. King….
  5. Use direct evidence & make sure that it matches the sub claim you are presenting. Do not force evidence to support a sub claim. Your sub claims are created from what the evidence tells you, not on what you think the sub claims should be before the essay has been written. Think about the tree model – it would be like putting palm fronds on a pine tree because you just wanted to make the tree have leaves.

 


 

How to Re-submit/Re-write your essay:

  1. Go back to Google Classroom and read your essay again, this time with my comments added. DO NOT RESOLVE THE COMMENTS THAT HAVE BEEN LEFT. If you get rid of those comments I will not be able to grade your re-write!
  2. Create a new Google Doc or Word document, create an MLA header, and title your essay: Expository Re-Write.
  3. Re-Write your essay using the comments that I left to guide you. I will be grading you on how well you were able to follow my directions and how well your essay fits the rubric at the end.
  4. Review the rubric and see where you think you now fall on the band scale. Leave a quick note at the bottom of your re-write that explain what you think you now earned and why you believe it – what changes did you make to raise your grade?
  5. Run your essay past a proof reader (human or digital). Grammarly.com is a great resource for proofreading. Make any adjustments needed.
  6. PRINT OUT your new essay.
  7. Submit it (as a hard copy) to Miss Krzyzanowski in class by the due date stated above for your block. You are welcome to submit it prior to the due date! Just turn it in to the correct drawer for your block and Miss Krzyzanowski will get it.

AGAIN, DO NOT DELETE OR RESOLVE YOUR COMMENTS OFF YOUR ORIGINAL ESSAY! I WILL NOT GRADE YOUR RE-WRITE IF THOSE COMMENTS HAVE BEEN RESOLVED OR DELETED. PART OF THIS PROCESS IS STARTING ON A CLEAN SLATE.

If you decide not to re-write but would like to earn 5 points back for your essay – please go back to your returned essay, again, keeping the comments just like those who are rewriting the whole thing. Read the essay and the comments that I wrote. On a typed sheet of paper, with an MLA header, write 5-10 sentences describing what you can do to write better next time based on the comments I left. Essentially, show me how you can use my feedback to improve on a future writing assignment. This is due the same day whole re-writes are due.